Read the revised version,
A street car named
desire could ransack
the qualities of a man.
It could rummage
the wealth of a man.
A want of a will
could damage all
no matter the place
nor the phase.
A wish for more
destroys like a fire
reduces into a zero.
compare with the original,
A street car named desire
could rout any of a liar
even in situations dire
wherever it be even in a shire
as it spirals up the entire
leaves nothing in the near
that be its power rather queer
would bring a fall in a fear.
Pick the best.
Meena.
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I would opt for the first version. I like the way it builds up section to section.
Thanks for your prompt reply.I will pick the version chosen by you.
Any other suggestion, please.
Meena.