Drift Of Life

 

I go into the clouds
fly  in pure bliss
the white wavy foam
embrace me.

I dive into the waters
get caught in the ripples
the blue murky flow
enwraps me.

I pass  into eternity
drift into the unfathomable
the timelessness stems up
surrounds me.

 

Edited  and workshopped on the original.

The original,

I know not where I am

into the clouds I go

fly and sail

into the water, I float

swim and dive

into the eternity

I find myself

drifting slowly

nothing can stop

none can object.

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