Grief-stricken she is,
her man has turned unfaithful
his eyes rested on her wealth
when denied he turned different.
She was liberal initially
met all his demands
being an embodiment of virtues
loved him the most.
He manipulated and schemed
threw an air of care and sincerity
it was a deceit
she found it very late.
She tightened the strings
he deserted her
she envisaged the turn
remained stoic and insulated.
The bash had an effect
mentally she was strong
her body let her down
she succumbed to an illness.
This is an improved version of the original.
A lot more could be said
silenced by the consequences
she goes away from the limelight
for reasons best known to her
a saddened heart be all for a cause.
Tossed and torn by love
she lost her grace, on the whole
her charm has waned
she looks a grief struck and bitten
by the destiny’s cruel hands.
The love she bore for a man
was well accepted in the beginning
later it turned into a faithless one
his eyes all set on her money
which stood beyond billions.
She gave him liberally at first
censored as she smelt of an unfaithfulness
which provoked him to the most
unkind he turned at once
sadistic and selfish all in one.
She cut her ties with him
could be the physical one
done so easily and smoothly
while her agony tormented her for long
being one of the mind and heart.
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